This is actually incredible and I don't just mean the smutty bits. The world building and the incredibly clever ways the MC is left anonymous are genius. I'm a fan of in depth character creation but I found myself really loving how little we got to say about our MC and how it left everything to our imagination. And all the subtle hints or casual comments explaining what kind of world this is without a lore dump was so incredibly impressive to me. This is just an amazing short story as a whole and I really enjoyed it.
Also I was very surprised at how much I enjoyed Lumi's scenes. Actually learned something about myself lol. I love this story for what it is but I'm also going crazy trying to come up with some good scenarios for the Countess/Lumi threesome. I would definitely pay for a sequel or a dlc type thing.
You probably spent a lot of time making this. Damn, I wish I could have the time to learn and become as good as you. Not only the story, but also the level of programming really hit me hard. I have to login just to say this.
Just one problem. The game offer a lot of choices which I believe are not so matter. It would be better to have only around 10 or 12 choices in one chapter, I think
so well-written, really hot but with a light touch that feels propulsive and still game-y! amazing! so glad I stumbled on this from one of my bundles! Thank you for sharing and I would love to see more IF from you!
Hello! Your game was my first contact with NSFW text-based ficction. I had a wonderful experience with it, you write very well. As a Brazilian I would be very happy to see a PT BR option in your game, so more people can have the same wonderful experience I had. I work with translations, you can read more about it here.
Also, the option to change the gender of the characters is a nice touch, good work all around.
Thank you so much for making and sharing this amazing creation with the world! It is extremely well written, I love the characters, and the whole story is undoubtedly a super fun experience. The choose-your-own-adventure aspect was super fun and it all felt like a comprehensive and complete experience.
In addition, the 18+ elements were super enjoyable, but also made me feel positive — not something that’s often the case when enjoying this sort of media. It was extremely mature and tasteful and I loved the customizability of all the characters (pronouns, etc.), it made it feel like anyone could enjoy this.
The characters were all well-written, I really appreciated their different personalities and the flirtatious nature of the Marquessa. Overall, this is an amazing project and I hope to see more amazing things!
this was so fun. for a very short story the characters were well fleshed out (i miss them already) and the world felt real. i was hoping it would be much longer and i'd be excited if you were to extend upon this or write something similar in future !
Made an account just so I could express how I appreciate this. Writing's preem, pacing and dialogue are solid (no pun intended), and neither the conversations nor the action disappointed. Brought back that magic that I used to feel when first reading Choose-Your-Own-Adventure books, and I thank you dearly for that.
It's really good! Well-written, well-paced and balanced with some action and some romance. An interesting setting to boot! Are you planning on writing a continuation? That would be amazing.
Loved this fiction, as I said in my rating. I just finished your List and I just want to say thank you for letting me be cismale in this. In fact, just thank you for letting all of the players be any combination of pronoun and body comp. I do love that two of the three find you adorable and that in both you get to be a bit bratty, as I'm personally a switch. I personally hope that you get a chance to write more interactive fiction, or perhaps more fiction in this setting as it gripped me almost as much as the lovely scenes.
This was nice. Lumi made me realise I might be more dom than I thought. I did not expect to feel the way that I did when I realised what they were into.
I didn't like Roan calling MC a loser. I don't mind name calling in this context, but loser just comes over a bit too malicious to me.
Yeah, I don't know if loser is harsher in some places than others; here (mid UK) it's moderately mild, but the US might be different, for example. Roan is supposed to straddle that line between almost being too much of an asshole - sorry if it didn't work for you.
This one was really fun. I haven't finished all the stories yet, but I love them. I really like the setting, and I wonderend if you, the Author, have any stories published? I would love to read more written by you!
I really loved this. Your writing style really benefits from the choose-your-own format and you have such a good, strong voice with your characters while making the PC not seem uncanny or forced into an honestly fun story despite a comparatively short length. I very much enjoyed the Marquessa and Lumi!
Eh, this game was okay, Bailey was the only thing I actually liked about it. Unlike most other people here I wasn't into Roan at all - mainly because I don't enjoy playing a sub and the humiliation kink doesn't do it for me whatsoever. Lumi wasn't my type either. The two issues that I had with this game was that the sex was pretty boring and there was no closure at the end with the LIs. Bailey was, as I said, the best thing about my playthrough - I liked his attitude and 'voice' - but even he came across as kind of half-assed because of the shortness of the game. Oh well.
Saw you in Ashley Bardhan's Kotaku article! I'm noting how varied the comments/reviews here are. By making a choose-your-own adventure story with such skill, you've given a variety of totally different people totally different experiences with the same work. It's very impressive to see such feedback!
You should write more like this, whether it's about sex or not!!
I didn't expect to like this.. it's very short but I liked it. Choosing their body parts everytime broke the immersion for me a bit but I understand the need for that. I loved Roan so much, his commanding tone and how he expects to be answered, his lines, personality.. I loved it.
Bailey, is more on the gentle side but I can picture him as a gentle big man. He was sweet. I did another playthrough just for him.
Lumi.. was totally not my type at all lol. I stopped when he told me to take "charge" in dance.
As for the Marquessa, sorry but I really didn't like her. She was too forced & pushy regardless of sexual orientation. I just ignored her parts.
But overall this could be made to a much longer thing. The story was actually interesting despite being short. And the romance isn't bad.
Very good writing , i thought it was going to be cringy but it wasnt and i loved the story that was there. You easily made a smut game while slipping in backstory which is nice fr
This was really... nice. I think I've learned that I am open to some flavors of experience I never thought I would be if I am enjoying the banter, feel safe, and can back out at any time.
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lumi lavender " the femboy " feels literally canon.
ey you got the same name as mine, wanna smash?
no.
Can we get a Android version pls
This is actually incredible and I don't just mean the smutty bits. The world building and the incredibly clever ways the MC is left anonymous are genius. I'm a fan of in depth character creation but I found myself really loving how little we got to say about our MC and how it left everything to our imagination. And all the subtle hints or casual comments explaining what kind of world this is without a lore dump was so incredibly impressive to me. This is just an amazing short story as a whole and I really enjoyed it.
Also I was very surprised at how much I enjoyed Lumi's scenes. Actually learned something about myself lol. I love this story for what it is but I'm also going crazy trying to come up with some good scenarios for the Countess/Lumi threesome. I would definitely pay for a sequel or a dlc type thing.
Thank you!
>Hi, I'm Lumi Lavender, she/her
You probably spent a lot of time making this. Damn, I wish I could have the time to learn and become as good as you. Not only the story, but also the level of programming really hit me hard. I have to login just to say this.
Just one problem. The game offer a lot of choices which I believe are not so matter. It would be better to have only around 10 or 12 choices in one chapter, I think
I believe it is because too much text would appear at once. and It can also help with immersion on the first playthrough.
so well-written, really hot but with a light touch that feels propulsive and still game-y! amazing! so glad I stumbled on this from one of my bundles! Thank you for sharing and I would love to see more IF from you!
evil big bad reveals herself and prepares her epic introduction.
Me: "I don't care."
Truly a perfect game.
absolutely need more of this
Hello! Your game was my first contact with NSFW text-based ficction. I had a wonderful experience with it, you write very well. As a Brazilian I would be very happy to see a PT BR option in your game, so more people can have the same wonderful experience I had. I work with translations, you can read more about it here.
Also, the option to change the gender of the characters is a nice touch, good work all around.
- With all respect, Alex
Hi Jemma,
Thank you so much for making and sharing this amazing creation with the world! It is extremely well written, I love the characters, and the whole story is undoubtedly a super fun experience. The choose-your-own-adventure aspect was super fun and it all felt like a comprehensive and complete experience.
In addition, the 18+ elements were super enjoyable, but also made me feel positive — not something that’s often the case when enjoying this sort of media. It was extremely mature and tasteful and I loved the customizability of all the characters (pronouns, etc.), it made it feel like anyone could enjoy this.
The characters were all well-written, I really appreciated their different personalities and the flirtatious nature of the Marquessa. Overall, this is an amazing project and I hope to see more amazing things!
Thank you :)
Thank you!
super fun
Super well written and hot!! love the unique format and amount you can customise in terms of gender/body!
This was fun and cute. I only wish it was more than just oral and hand play.
this was so fun. for a very short story the characters were well fleshed out (i miss them already) and the world felt real. i was hoping it would be much longer and i'd be excited if you were to extend upon this or write something similar in future !
Made an account just so I could express how I appreciate this. Writing's preem, pacing and dialogue are solid (no pun intended), and neither the conversations nor the action disappointed. Brought back that magic that I used to feel when first reading Choose-Your-Own-Adventure books, and I thank you dearly for that.
It's really good! Well-written, well-paced and balanced with some action and some romance. An interesting setting to boot! Are you planning on writing a continuation? That would be amazing.
Loved this fiction, as I said in my rating. I just finished your List and I just want to say thank you for letting me be cismale in this. In fact, just thank you for letting all of the players be any combination of pronoun and body comp. I do love that two of the three find you adorable and that in both you get to be a bit bratty, as I'm personally a switch. I personally hope that you get a chance to write more interactive fiction, or perhaps more fiction in this setting as it gripped me almost as much as the lovely scenes.
Ahhh, this is excellent. I've been hoping to learn how to write interactive fiction and this is great inspiration!
First time in a long time I've read something and I'm sitting here smiling and giggling like I'm in middle school again. 1000000/10
Definitely making fan art for this!!
THIS IS TO FUCKING GOOD YUM YUM YUM
Please do! And let me know if you do!
This was nice. Lumi made me realise I might be more dom than I thought. I did not expect to feel the way that I did when I realised what they were into.
I didn't like Roan calling MC a loser. I don't mind name calling in this context, but loser just comes over a bit too malicious to me.
Yeah, I don't know if loser is harsher in some places than others; here (mid UK) it's moderately mild, but the US might be different, for example. Roan is supposed to straddle that line between almost being too much of an asshole - sorry if it didn't work for you.
this was fucking awesome, i hope you make more of this because it was fun to read
yes im a nerd
This one was really fun. I haven't finished all the stories yet, but I love them. I really like the setting, and I wonderend if you, the Author, have any stories published? I would love to read more written by you!
Yes! Two books (https://books2read.com/ap/n7dLg2/Jemma-Topaz), some short stories (https://www.scribblehub.com/profile/68692/jemma_topaz/), and some fanfic (https://archiveofourown.org/users/Jemma_Topaz/works)
Somebody needs to pay this guy to make this into an full story visual novel!
I really loved this. Your writing style really benefits from the choose-your-own format and you have such a good, strong voice with your characters while making the PC not seem uncanny or forced into an honestly fun story despite a comparatively short length. I very much enjoyed the Marquessa and Lumi!
Eh, this game was okay, Bailey was the only thing I actually liked about it. Unlike most other people here I wasn't into Roan at all - mainly because I don't enjoy playing a sub and the humiliation kink doesn't do it for me whatsoever. Lumi wasn't my type either.
The two issues that I had with this game was that the sex was pretty boring and there was no closure at the end with the LIs. Bailey was, as I said, the best thing about my playthrough - I liked his attitude and 'voice' - but even he came across as kind of half-assed because of the shortness of the game. Oh well.
Saw you in Ashley Bardhan's Kotaku article! I'm noting how varied the comments/reviews here are. By making a choose-your-own adventure story with such skill, you've given a variety of totally different people totally different experiences with the same work. It's very impressive to see such feedback!
You should write more like this, whether it's about sex or not!!
I didn't expect to like this.. it's very short but I liked it. Choosing their body parts everytime broke the immersion for me a bit but I understand the need for that. I loved Roan so much, his commanding tone and how he expects to be answered, his lines, personality.. I loved it.
Bailey, is more on the gentle side but I can picture him as a gentle big man. He was sweet. I did another playthrough just for him.
Lumi.. was totally not my type at all lol. I stopped when he told me to take "charge" in dance.
As for the Marquessa, sorry but I really didn't like her. She was too forced & pushy regardless of sexual orientation. I just ignored her parts.
But overall this could be made to a much longer thing. The story was actually interesting despite being short. And the romance isn't bad.
Please make this a series! It's so good!!!
One of the rare times where you come for the smut but stay for the story.
Very good queer game, and mature bdsm. I appreciate consent of differents protagonists : it's fresh and cool
A lot of love was poured into this game, and it shows ♥
Thanks for making this. I enjoyed the heck out of it.
So much fun. I loved Lumi.
my one complaint is there’s no sequel.
Very good writing , i thought it was going to be cringy but it wasnt and i loved the story that was there. You easily made a smut game while slipping in backstory which is nice fr
that's was a good experience
This was really... nice. I think I've learned that I am open to some flavors of experience I never thought I would be if I am enjoying the banter, feel safe, and can back out at any time.